For example: "Slapping my hand down on her skin, she lets out a deep groan at my contact." This actually says that the girl has taken his hand and slapped herself with it. There were also problems such as confusion of pronoun and antecedent. There were places where the tense changed in the middle of a sentence. This is the tense we all grew up reading and pretty much everyone knows how if works. There are different forms of first person present tense and if you don't know how to pick one and stay in it, you should just write in first person past or even, gasp! third person past. The biggest problem I had with it was the quality of the writing. There are other MC romances out there that I would recommend first but if you've already read a few and are looking for more you would probably enjoy it. I enjoyed it but it wasn't anything I would particularly recommend.
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